Do you like my poem? how can i improve it?

Sheeeesh, I almost missed this because my list of faves in YAPoetry is huge already and I haven't been adding anyone.but your poetry is different and wonderfully emotive. you just keep writing and listen to the harsh critics, too. they can get mean but some know their stuff...but what YOU want the poem to be takes precedence so don't doubt yourself, kay, bai....PEACE LOVE EMPATHY LC